User blog comment:Jabberjay78/One Last Games/@comment-5082922-20130414195711

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I’m under the ocean, my arms wrapped around Lightning Tree as we share an underwater kiss. It’s a memory that never happened. It’s no more than a wish, a dream that’s befallen me nearly every night.

Instead of Lightning going down into the cruel sea by himself, I’m there with him, sharing our last moments together, our last breaths, our last heartbeats, neither of us braving death alone. It’s not just a dream, it’s a wish; it’s how things should have happened.



Is one a really good paragrah, not only is the words very well choosen so that the situation feel more real, you are also very good at "describing the world who the character's eyes" which makes me feel like I personally know and understand Sydnee. I do not question the background of Sydnee's emotions, and I do not questions her wish of her dying with him, which I may had if the writing hadn't been very good. I feel a lot of sympatchy for her, which is odd because I usually don't feel much for characters in books, usually when I read, I don't let my own feelings get involved but here I can't help it, and that is very good writing, indeed.