User blog comment:JWW/JWW's First Hunger Games/@comment-5104657-20120622213907/@comment-5179410-20120623012543

I think you're doing a good job so far. One tip: try not to make lists. Add the reactions of the tributes when they find something. And also, try to add details of the fights. Which sounds better?

She tried to hit him with a sword. He dodged it. He shot her in the arm with an arrow. She cried in pain. She took it out. He ran away.

OR

She lunged viciously at him. He dived aside, the sword missing him by barely an inch. Breathing heavily, he notched an arrow as fast as he could. He released, and it hit on her arm with ease. She screamed in agony, and yanked it out of her bloody arm. He sprinted away before she could retaliate.