User blog comment:Equestria Gurl/The 77th Hunger Games!/@comment-5824375-20130928211112

Name: Acheron Bane 

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'''Advice: Acheron, spend the next day finding an area to set up a shelter. Avoid confrontation with other tributes if you must, kill who comes across you. Even if they ask for an alliance, itʻs pointless to accept when youʻll kill them off later on. You might as well end them when you can. Another tip; make sure this certain area is concealed and with nearby food and drinking supplies. This will be the crucial point, and you might have to travel some distance in order to achieve this. But this shouldnʻt be much of a challenge, especially considering what youʻve been through throughout your past. A final thing to keep in mind: Make yourself as sullen and trasparent as possible. Become a shadow; an unknown threat creeping in the shades. You are a simple ghost to everyone else, arenʻt you? Become that phantom, and stay within the darkness. Good luck Acheron. '''

TEMPLATE FOR USERS:

What did you like about my writing?

I guess what I liked most about your writing is that you managed to mention multiple tributes in a single POV. Itʻs good to see a lot of interaction with the characters, as it develops them and makes them appear to be well, people.

What can I improve on?

Itʻs good to read, but I think you should pay attention to some certain parts. I noticed some spelling errors and sometimes you used the same word often. Add some diversity into your writing and itʻll become a much more enjoyable journey for us to live through our tributes.

Did you like how your tribute(s) were portrayed?

Yes, although Acheron probably wouldnʻt get that very distracted. Otherwise, your portrayal of him was fine.

How often should I update?

Due to the amount of tributes in the Games, I believe you should take breaks here and there but update slightly often to keep readers interested. Otherwise, people might forget about these Games if there is nothing to read.