User blog comment:HawkWD/The 23rd Hunger Games- A Trilogy/@comment-7317707-20130611234733/@comment-4097043-20130612000013

Your first person writing is actually really good, the only thing I would suggest with scenes like Pinea's death would be to extend the scene, explaining Pinea's feelings a little more. You did a really good job with explaining the thoughts and feelings of Alice and Lucas after they lost loved ones, and Pinea's POV could've used more of that.